Hmmm

Very chill, very smooth. But in my opinion, it needed to build up to something with a lead in it. Say fade out a couple of instruments like you did towards the end, then come in double forte with a quick pace lead. But I don't know, this song might be better with out it.

Hope this helps

sweet

The kid at the beginning was a bit creepy. But...
"mommy said that she be back where she at?"
"daddy why you crying it aint like you to do that"

Epic...